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Monday, April 8, 2013

Bad Boys, Bad Boys (ConCarolinas 2012 Notes)



Hi everyone! Look who's going for record of Longest Notes Delay? *innocent whistle*

Eh, I've said my piece. To say the least, I've been busy. Here, let's look at the less-than-golden boys of fiction, and what makes them tick.

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Bad Boys, Bad Boys
James R. Tuck, Faith Hunter, Kalayna Price, Jim S. Bernheimer, William Hatfield, Dahlia Rose Moderator: Misty Massey

Spike, Mal Reynolds, Han Solo, Repairman Jack, Jack Sparrow, Jareth the goblin king, the man with no name – we like bad boys. But what constitutes a bad boy?
JT: The guy willing to do what it takes regardless of the consequences.
FH: And women like him.
JT: The roughness tended with a good heart.
FH: Even with Spike, there’s something good that’s under that evil exterior. The guy who gets the job done, whatever the job may be. Not ready to settle down.
KP: Can be bad guy, villain, love interest...
JB: A scoundrel, a rogue, stays true to himself, doesn’t spin on a dime – The journey from bad boy to something other than bad boy is not overnight, and has setbacks, if you’re going to redeem him.
WH: Has a too good to be true boy who’s going evil over the course of his series
KP: The bad boy doesn’t necessarily need to be redeemed. E.g. Jack Reacher.
DR: The heroine has to feel she can fix/redeem him. She has to feel part of the solution, not the problem.
KP: The bad boy doesn’t have to have a love interest. But often they’ve had someone they’ve lost or who was killed to push them into the bad boy role.

What’s the difference between a bad boy and a villain?
DR: The bad boy is the guy with a conscience. The villain will do it and say "F it, I’m done". Even if the villain has a love interest, he’s still just looking out for himself.
WH: The bad guys are going for personal gain and that’s it. The bad boy has a conscience but he’s able to successfully bury it most of the time, but every so often Pandora’s box opens.
JB: John Cusak – Grosse Point Blank – he’s an assassin,and no one believes him until he’s actually caught doing it. Minnie Driver saw him as somewhat fixable.  Dan Ackroyd is just after a paycheck.
KP: The bad boy is sexy. Doesn’t mean he’ll get the girl, but he can attract her.
MM: Han Solo – attitude mixed with sexiness.
FH: Fun to write bad boys who cross the line sometimes into villain and back again. Also, bad boys who are led to test the limits of their success.
JT: The difference is cruelty for cruelty’s sake (villain). The bad boy has a nobility streak, however rough. Even if he’s the meanest person in the book there’s still something deep inside. Evil is a matter of intent.

Aud: The bad boy still has his own code of honour, reason for doing something bad
KP: Even villains still must have a code, however messed up it is.

Is there a difference between the bad boy and the antihero?
MM: Antihero is  more damaged, has a lot more to lose or has already lost what there is to lose. Mal and Han still have somewhere to go; Batman has lost everything.
JB: The antihero doesn’t see himself as a villain or antihero. He's doing things for their own reasons and he believes those reasons to be just.

Can a villain backslide to antihero, and backslide to bad boy? E.g. Farscape – sounds like a  bad writing decision. It has to be logical to the reader. Characters have to progress in a logical fashion.
FH: Still have to make the characters behave.
JT: That’s a cycle of redemption. Must have a catalyst for that, a character to help them redeem themselves.

Bad boys vs. Bad girls?
DR: Writes strong women who can match a bad boy. (pass)
WH: Has not written a bad boy. (pass)
JB: (pass)
KP: We have strong women, we have bad women, we have heroines, but not really many bad girls.
MM: It’s a cultural issue. Bad boys = more violence; Bad girls = more sex.

Audience question: How many tormented male characters have been built on the backs of broken women? (eg. Murdered wife, etc)
Bad boys – recklessness, wild; military men have generally chosen their path, not necessarily reckless wild etc.
Military – badass, but not bad boys. Very family-oriented. Usually working towards going home to their families. They want to see their children and save their family. They get home and the curtain falls away and they become family men.

Who is your favorite bad boy?
JT: Mal Reynolds. Nathan Fillion is charming.
FH: Jack Reacher.
MM: Clint Eastwood – The man with no name.
KP: Jareth the Goblin King.
JB: CT Westcott – Will T. Bucko
WH: The road warrior. But Vlad Totosh.
DR: Eric in TrueBlood

Comics: Uncorruptable and Irredeemable – Mark Wade
Watchmen – all of them are bad boys or villains (except for Night Owl)
Lilith St. Crow – Jill Kismet (bad girl)

Women can be badass, too, not just a dude with breasts.

For all of us who are writers – we need more kickass women, we need to change the culture, change the paradigm.

What is the bad boy trope?
Sexy, attitude, reckless, with nobility/their own code.
JB: These days, we could have a bad boy metrosexual.

Monday, March 25, 2013

When a Change Really Does You(r Story) Good (March Madness Check-In, Day 25) #WIPmadness


"Maybe you weren't ready for that ... but your kids are going to love it."
- Marty McFly, Back to the Future, Part I

I've been enjoying all of the Back to the Future references this month. Kudos to whoever came up with the idea first because it's been a lot of fun. Michael J. Fox has a special place in my heart because he's from my city, and there's even a few buildings around here with his name on it. Little known fact: did you know I have a poster of a young MJF circa 1987, urging kids to read? I think it was part of a series the American Library Association put out back then. The public library I was working at was throwing it out finally in 2007 because they had newer, shinier posters, so they let me take it. It now adorns one corner of my office, and it kind of broke my heart on Friday when two techs came by to install a new scanner and one of them said, "Who's Marty McFly?" Sigh.

So, before anything can happen to tinker with our timeline, I'd better announce another March Madness winner:

Carol Garvin!

Congratulations, Carol!

Now, back to the regularly scheduled madness. ^__^

One of the other awesome actors I had the fortune to see at Emerald City Comicon was none other than Christopher Lloyd, a.k.a. Doc Brown. He was fun to listen to. Before he began the Q&A, he mentioned something that neither me nor my husband knew: that before Michael J. Fox was chosen to play the role of Marty McFly, a significant chunk of the film was shot with a completely different actor.

Whoa. Really? That's a huge change to make for a major motion picture that far into production. But it looks like the decision paid off, because can you imagine the movies any other way?

Okay, so think about that. Have you ever made such a significant change to a writing project that you hadn't expected you'd ever make? Perhaps something that was there from the start that you'd started to ignore in revisions because it was so ingrained into the fibre of your work? Or have you began a project with one premise driving the story only to realize that no, the story needs to go somewhere else, and this thing you started with needs the boot?

One that really sticks out for me, one for the list of amusing tales later on in my writing career, is the fact that I started out writing the manuscript I'm sending to agents soon in an unsuitable POV: First-person present tense. To the point where writing in present tense came naturally to me, felt natural, and felt right. *shudders* I've learned my lesson now. This is not to say that it might work for others (case in point: Hunger Games) but it definitely wasn't meant to be for me. Turns out my characters function much better in the past tense. Realizing that mistake and fixing it was vital, because it helped me rediscover my real voice, not the voice I'd been adopting for all that time.

It was an eye-opener, but I feel so much better for it, and even more confident about my voice. Even though I basically did the equivalent with POV as was done with the actor for Marty McFly.

Marty: "Doc... what if we don't succeed?"
Doc Brown: "We must succeed.
"

And we will.

That's my two cents madness for the week. How about you? Thanks for checking in here, folks! Now don't forget to stop by Shari's blog tomorrow.

Monday, March 18, 2013

Taking Breathers (March Madness Check-In, Day 18) #WIPmadness


 Hello, March Madness Wipsters! How's your progress going now that we're more than halfway through the month?

Say, remember how back on Day 4, I mentioned seeing Sir Patrick Stewart live at Emerald City Comicon in Seattle? Well, another thing he said during his talk really stuck with me.

It was from the story of how he landed the role of Captain Picard. The tale was itself lively and amusing and I'm pretty sure you can find an awesome version of it online somewhere (like, say, HERE - and the fifteen bucks is totally worth it, especially if you watch the Wil Wheaton vs. Paul and Storm dramatic reading and concert). He had a lot of fun things to say. But I'm gushing, so I'll stop now, kthx. ;)

Anyway, what he said that stuck was that he had schooled himself into doing one thing after an audition: he would assume that he did not get the role, and he would then put it completely from his mind by doing something enjoyable to forget it completely. That way, instead of worrying about roles he didn't know if he'd get, if he did manage to land a part, it would be a delightful surprise. (Cue amusing anecdote about how his agent had to hunt him down when he was chosen to be Picard.)

Gee, auditions for roles? Stressing over being chosen? I don't know about you, but to me that sounds a whole lot like the publishing business, don't you?

Digression: So I totally checked out this weekend. Kind of starting with Thursday when DH and I got the chance to see the Canucks play live, things got crazy-busy. Several non-writing commitments reared their heads, and in the off moments, my own mind was thoroughly entrenched in the land of Dobrenica, set deep in the heart of eastern Europe. Sherwood Smith's Blood Spirits was the sequel to Coronets and Steel, and I apologize to my fellow hosts for not checking in much the past few days, but it had me pleasantly mesmerized.

I have just one goal this month, which is to work towards sending out submissions on my YA high fantasy. Last week I mentioned how I needed to rework a major section. Well, the fixes were made and it's now in my critique partner's hands. I know this wasn't as big as an actual submission, but it is the next logical step, and I am waiting. Rather than twiddle my thumbs, I went straight back to work on my non-YA urban fantasy. And then I grabbed a book I'd been wanting to read for some time, and totally fell under its spell.

I feel so much better now!

The more I think about it, the more I realize that for me, this was me taking that break. I shut down the concerns of the outside world and put the worries from my mind.

Have you ever done something similar? Distracted your brain from fixating on possible outcomes of something huge, like a submission, by doing something fun? Speaking as someone who likes to push forward and not let go until I'm done, I totally recommend it. Now I just have to remember that when it comes to *actual* submissions. Baha.

So. Um. What else can I say today? Hm ... I feel like I'm forgetting something.

Oh, yeah. PRIZE TIME! :D

Congratulations to ... *drumroll* ...

Jennifer Pickrell!

Jennifer, head on over to Denise Jaden's blog to pick one of the many fabulous prizes, then be sure to e-mail her at d (at) denisejaden (dot) com with your choice.

And don't forget to check in at Shari Green's blog tomorrow.

Monday, March 11, 2013

Never Alone (March Madness Check-In, Day 11) #WIPmadness


I didn't quite make my goals for this weekend's madness. I'd hoped to have an entire section rewritten. After slashing a good 5K from my manuscript (no joke), I was ready to make repairs. But I got caught on a paragraph and stalled out. Totally.

Those words needed to go. A heart-to-heart with my critique partner helped me realize that they'd been a relic from when I was in a completely different place in my life, and by the end of Friday, I was glad for them to disappear. And once they were cut, I was eager to get to fixing. But Sunday afternoon, I spent an entire hour agonizing over one little part. I made no progress at all. I was trying to be a Good Little Girl and stay off the Internet. (Hah.) So I floundered.

Eventually I gave up and asked my husband. He set down what he was doing and came to help me. I described my troubles. Within five minutes, the problem evaporated.  

So yeah, I'm feeling pretty grateful to both of them right now.

This was a reminder to me that writing may be a solitary act, but that doesn't mean I have to work completely in a vacuum. None of us do. Having someone else to talk things through with (be it best friend, partner, writing group, Twitter community or cat) can really help when we're struggling. Heck, that's one of the awesome things about this month (and even when it's over, with the #WIPmadness group and weekly check-ins), because we have each other. Sometimes, if we're wrestling with a writing problem, all we have to do is seek advice from a like-minded soul who can understand and offer assistance.

Even if the mere act of talking out the problem is all we need to help us realize what we have to do.

So, how's your Madness going? How have others helped you figure things out about your WIP or other goals? If you're struggling with something in your Madness goals right now, would you like to share? Maybe the community will be able to help!

Don't forget to check out Shari Green's blog tomorrow for March Madness, Day 12.

Monday, March 4, 2013

Mad, mad Monday ... (March Madness check-in, Day 4) #WIPmadness

"You can have fun and do good work at the same time. In fact, you do better work if you're having fun." 

Sir Patrick Stewart (Emerald City Comicon panel, March 3, 2013)


Merry Monday Morning, Mad Marchers! Mmph. I could misuse many minutes mincing my melliloquent missive. But don't mind my mirthful mania, however miasmic it may be.

Wait for it ... wait for it ...

Okay, there! The coffee's finally kicked in. And now it's time to check in!

Friendly reminder: If you are trying to comment with a WordPress account and having trouble, try using something else. For example, do you have a G-mail address? That's your Google account. For some reason though the Internet is seriously trending towards unity, certain websites don't seem to be playing nice with each other. Hope this helps!

Friendly reminder, part II: If you haven't signed up for March Madness, you have not yet missed the boat. There is no deadline. Latecomers welcome!

So how goes your morning? Your month? Your madness?

Done now, I swear. :)

I just got back from a wild weekend south of the border (so for me, Seattle) at Emerald City Comicon. Lots of geeking out, seeing celebrities, and spending time with friends. Patrick Stewart's panel was the last one of the convention, and it was *packed*. That above quote that I shared with y'all rang so true. So I ask: how do you bring fun into your work? What great examples can you share of how enjoying yourself while writing has made your work better? For me, sometimes just hanging out on twitter in writers' threads actually helps me get more work done. Especially when we can ask questions and give each other instafeedback. How about you?

March the Fourth be with you!

And don't forget to check in tomorrow at Shari Green's blog.

Monday, February 25, 2013

Endings and Beginnings (WIPmadness Check-In, Week 4)


... Well, I tried to be productive this weekend. Charlie had other ideas.

Before I continue, an important announcement: With the end of February comes an event that I now look forward to every year. It's the reason behind why we at #WIPmadness do the weekly check-ins. And if you haven't tried it yet, for whatever reason, I can't recommend it enough: March Madness for Writers! The month-long challenge is about setting big goals and trying to reach them. Be sure to stop by Denise Jaden's blog later this week for info on signup, and to get started on a month of daily check-ins, wonderful camaraderie, and tons of prizes to be won. I'm offering a copy of Morgan Keyes' DARKBEAST and a first chapter critique. Hope to see you there!

So, here we are at the last #WIPmadness check-in for February. Did you meet your goals? Nearly there? Decent progress, at least? Or was it more of a "hahahahanotsomuch"? All are valid answers. Whatever your circumstances were, I'm sure you did what you could, and like we talked about last week, it's more important to take care of yourself.

On that note, I'm definitely glad I had last week's little epiphany. I pretty much axed my social calendar last week, and I feel better for taking the quiet time. Of course, no sooner that I did than I caught the latest cold that's been going around, but at least I've been resting and taking care of myself. Thank you Blogspot for allowing posts to be scheduled, so I could write this Sunday evening then conk out after the Oscars. (Edit to add: I liked the show, but I was disappointed by a few of the results. Argh.) Thank you dayjob for sick days, because despite the absurd amount of rest I got over the weekend, I definitely need more. I may be a bit late in responding today, sleep being my priority, but you'll hear from me eventually. Progress-wise I was able to give my critique partner beta-feedback on her really cool urban fantasy. I got more work done on the final fine-tuning/revisions for my own piece. I also read some more and, prior to this cold, was able to focus on my fitness. 

How did your week, and your month, go? Are you looking forward to the writers' March Madness as much as I am?

Monday, February 18, 2013

Self-Care: WIPmadness Check-In, Week 3

"Go home, Springform Cake, you're drunk" ©2013 Laura Sheana Taylor. My most recent baking adventure had unexpected results. (This shows a cake that rose lopsidedly, where one side baked much higher than the other. The top resembles a disc that has been tilted.)

Yesterday I was exhausted. Not from a hangover, exactly, though the party was definitely one to remember even without all the cake-making hijinks that preceded it. Even after I fixed the cake's severe balance issues, problems with the white icing on a cartoon character's face led to totally unintended, highly-suggestive images that were thankfully iced out. 

No, I was feeling a little drained. Okay, a lot drained. Since January, instead of the usual "whew, holidays are over and I can relax" feeling I've come to expect, instead it was more of a "go-go-go-hah-what-made-you-think-your-time-was-yours" kinda thing, with no stop in sight.

It's partly my own fault. I said yes to ALL THE THINGS and didn't stop to take a breath. I was not kind to myself. Yes, I had a blast with all the commitments and parties and social events, but I didn't give myself much time to recover. 

Which made me a crabby, unproductive little girl. 

Realizing this was the best thing that happened to me this week. So I resolved to take measures that would calm things down a bit. It's a work in progress, but I'm already feeling better than I was. Sleep, and self-care in general, is such a vital thing, but it can be so easy to forget that truth. Especially if like me, you have a day job in addition to writing goals and/or responsibilities.

Sometimes we just need to take a break.

"This is Why They Call it a Cat Nap" ©2013 Laura Sheana Taylor. Two kitties sleeping. Pixel and Charlie are too tuckered to pretend to hate each other right now.

Sooo. That was my week. How was yours?

Wednesday, February 13, 2013

Standout Characters (SIWC 2012 Notes)

"Charlie Wants to be Bucky Katt" © 2008 Laura Sheana Taylor. Charlie loves standing on his hind legs and staring out the window. He's, umm, special. Let's just leave it at that.


I still have some ConCarolinas 2012 notes, but I thought I'd mix it up a bit. Enjoy another slice of SIWC 2012 by one of my favourite teachers, Donald Maass!


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Standout Characters
Donald Maass

How to create memorable characters, how to make them real, flawed, witty, stuck in our mind

What is it that makes characters pop off the page, characters that we immediately care about and want to stay with for the long stretch of the novel? What is it that makes characters we can’t forget?

Three Types of Main Character

There is something amiss with almost every protagonist in almost every manuscript they sample: the main character is one of three types of characters.

1st type: An Everyman/woman, someone like you or me even if it’s set in another place – someone whose life is ordinary (even if it’s another world).

- Write down your favourite thing about this person. What do you like the most about this character? When are they at their most awesome? What is their most awesomeness? What moves you the most?

- (So many are victims, standing still, and in the first paragraph are whiners.)

- This quality – take the next few minutes to experience this quality.

2nd type : the hero who is strong, whose job takes them in the way of danger (rcmp/cop, detective, firefighter, knight) – characters who have responsibility, who have a gun

-  Find one way in which your hero is regular, human, in some way.

- How can we see that quality on page one, to see that they’re in need right away?

3rd type: Dark protagonist – antiheroes, monsters, self-loathing, unhappy

- Write one way in which this character wants to change – be less tormented, more human. What does that look like? What would be symbolic for this character? How can we feel and see that yearning, hope, longing for something right away on the first page?

If this doesn’t work for your opening, then possibly it’s that your opening doesn’t work.

Making the Reader Care

Everyman/woman protagonists seem to be the right thing for women’s fiction and literary fiction. Characters whose lives and preoccupations we recognize, and that’s fine. They may be vividly or realistically drawn. But just because they feel real doesn’t mean we care. Recognizing a character and caring about them are different.

What causes us to care about them immediately?

- Friends, family, people known for a long time, been through a lot with them, know their lives and struggles, know why you’re proud of them, you love them. You’ve opened your heart to that person.
- Readers don’t have the luxury of years to come to love a character. We have mere seconds.

Think about last time you were in a bookstore. Something catches your eye. You pick it up and read the first page and put it back. Seconds. This is why first lines are so important, engaging your reader right away matters. Just because people are in the same situation as you doesn’t mean you care.

What makes people care is what makes them different – brave, funny, the things they are at their best. That’s what we need to experience (what is strong or good or principled) right away on page 1.

Same thing with heroes and heroines – Give us something we can cheer for. Yes, they do amazing things, but they leave the reader ice cold, not caring. No human connection – they’re not real. Too perfect. Need a way to say to self, “Hey, this guy may be doing incredible things, but is a real person. They have a heart. It’s okay.”

Dark protagonists are flavor of the century these days. Sexy, haunted, tormented, alluring, look great in leather …. but what’s wrong with that?  Because they’re tormented. Depressed. Miserable. They hate themselves. They’re suffering. Who wants to be around that?

We back away from suffering – and that’s true in fiction too.

BUT we don’t back away from hope. We are drawn to hope, the longing for change, the need to be human, happy, end suffering. This is the things we need to feel about these characters.

What engages your heart, draws you to that main character? It’s something that we *feel* about that character.

Maintaining Reader Interest

How to maintain interest? The character has to *remain* fascinating.

Write a foundational attribute of your main character. What kind of person are they? Analytical? Faithful? Curious? Determined?

What habit or tic do they have that suggests they’re the opposite. Decisive? What makes them indecisive?

Find 3 places in the manuscript where you can show that oddity or tic.

Alternate: What’s one thing your character can do that no one else can? (For #1 types, it can be something they’re expert in)

Write one time in which this special ability will be a benefit.

Write one time in which this will hurt your protagonist.

Anybody ordinary can have an extraordinary ability. Or maybe something just a little eerie, an intuition.

Or, try giving your protagonist a handicap. So many exotic conditions and diseases these days that make them special in some way. Even just dying of something. What’s the best thing about it? Write down 1 way in which it’s working for protagonist (but also 3 times in which it gets in the way). Particularly one time in which it’s failed or nearly so.

Or, try this: What’s something hard to explain about your protagonist? Something he or she can’t explain about himself? What’s a mystery about your protagonist? Find one way to deepen that mystery. Find one way to bury that mystery deeper. Find one way in which someone is affected by this mystery, then make it hard to find out. THEN take the explanation of what it is in chapter 2 and plant the explanation somewhere in the last quarter of the story.

What does your main character know about themselves that is absolutely true, something they can say with confidence?

What is something even more true about them that he or she doesn’t know yet?

When in the story and through whom are you going to clobber your protagonist with an inside realization/recognition about him or herself? When would be a good time to do that, and when would be a good time to deliver a truth your protagonist can’t see?

What is one thing your protagonist knows about people, an insight that your protagonist has into people that no one else does, because of who he or she is? Find three times, places, or people, where your protagonist can have that observation about human nature in that is unique – then add a character on whom your protagonist can’t get a read.

Who does your main character or protagonist love the best? Write down one flaw, something that other character does wrong, something your protagonist can see through. Create something about this character that is negative that your character can see through, can say, “I know why he or she did that, know them enough to see past that.”

Or, take the same character your protagonist loves and where that character is going to be in ten years. Now give it to your protagonist to understand, see, foretell.

Pick some small thing that happens in the novel. Trivial. Something that occurs, is done, is said – a little piece of hurt. This small thing that happens is an illustration of something much bigger in the world, something about the way people treat people in something small. Then give your protagonist a little space for exposition in which s/he can feel some anger, indignation, sense of injustice, however small. Small injustices are all over the place. Little insults. Ways to get indignant.

Or: something happens in your story that is mean, tragic, happens to your protagonist that is adverse in some way. Now find a way to show us that your protagonist rises above, shows some dignity, some grace, strength, tolerance, wisdom, at a moment of testing, of insult or pain or injury or tragedy.

Or: In the course of the story, what’s the most selfless thing your protagonist does? Greatest self-sacrifice – confession, forgiveness, sacrifices himself or herself. A mission? A confession? An assist? Insight, realization, change?

Now: pick another character in the story and find in which way they’ve been affected by, changed by, what your protagonist has done.

What is it that keeps us engaged with characters through the long haul of the novel? What makes them continuously fascinating?

Quirks are intriguing. Characters who are special – gifted, handicapped, whose experience in life is unlike ours in one way, who must deal with, grapple with, suffer/reap the benefits of being different in some way?

- People with powers or paranormal abilities

- Characters who are self-aware, who see more and understand more than us are intriguing

- Things that make readers more fully engaged than we are

Days when we are alive, awake, alert, engaged and our brains are on fire and we’re seing, feeling, getting, understanding, in command of our world – those are the days we want to be alive, the days we want to be with our characters – that’s why we’re working on insights and opinions – things that make them engaging, interesting, real (even without being paranormal or superpowered) – your protagonist can always be having a great day in a way, a day when things are vivid and real and important.

(That can be you at the keyboard every writing day, by the way)

This makes your characters interesting and attractive all the way through the story, and for you, every writing day.

Goal: Make your main character surprise you in one way every day. Dazzle you, sparkle, in some way every day. See something, feel something, say something – strong, different, alive, amazing. Every writing day. What would happen to your main character? Well, people will remember your character’s name.

Strengthen Your Antagonist

Secondary characters, particularly antagonists, are often weak.

Who is the antagonist in your story?

The villain needs page time to develop him/herself.

Romance fiction: the hero and heroine want to be together, but something is keeping them apart. Drawn together but blasted apart. The antagonist is the other main character – the hero is in the heroine’s way and vice-verse. Romance is a push-pull.

The antagonist is whoever gets in the way the most.

Write one thing the antagonist most believes. Their core truth. What they know that is true, that is right, that other people should know? In what way are they actually right? What have they got right? What do they believe that is actually true? What do they think that is wrong in the world that is truly wrong? Unjust that is truly unjust? And what moment does the main character realize, understand, and accept that the antagonist is right? Get it, see the point? Humble themself enough to say the antagonist is right? What is the moment that the protagonist knows that the antagonist is right about them? Has the truth about them?

Those who love us the most know us the best, but the people who know us even better than that are the people who hate us.

What does your antagonist most want to bring about? What’s their goal, ideal outcome, perfect world? How is one way this something everybody wants? Search and find in the manuscript where your antagonist states that and replace it with the words you just used.

What’s the worst thing your antagonist does in the manuscript? Write it down, then when you’ve written it down, write down next how it is that this is something your antagonist has sworn never to do, hates it, thinks it’s wrong. Then write why it is when they do this thing they abhor that they must do it, reluctantly, against their wills and principles – it must be done. Why? For what good purpose must it be done? Why does your protagonist realize he or she is glad that it was done?

One more thing you can do: Make a note of three times, three more things your antagonist can do in your story to get what he or she wants, to achieve his or her goal/dream, to bring about a better world.

Secondary characters

- Pick a secondary character (doesn’t matter who) – write down their name

- This character is alive, on your protagonist’s side, except for one significant way: write down one way to use what you’ve just written down somewhere in the course of the story.

- What is the moment when your character best understands, most understands them, finds your character important?

- Can you swing them from love to hate, manipulate them so that they are outraged by something your protagonist does?

- What have they been through together, done together? What is it about this other character that your protagonist can count on? What’s the article of trust between them? “I know you will never___.” “I know you will always be there.”

- Find the moment when the trust is betrayed and breaks down – when that character betrays or the protagonist, or vice verse

- What does this other character see about your protagonist that your protagonist denies, doesn’t accept, doesn’t want to hear? Is there a moment when the secondary character can call them out on their shit and see the truth?

- What is the greatest sacrifice this character can make for your protagonist? (do, see, say)

- When is this character there for your protagonist with something that he or she doesn’t even know he or she desperately needs?

- There can be cardboard, undeveloped, secondary characters. Whose shared history, dynamic, give and take just isn’t deep enough.

- Now, pick another character, and start working on them. There’s a lot of characters who can do more. Underutilized characters are an issue in a lot of manuscripts.


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